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The drunk adventures of Slacky and keeastman


Slacky McSlackAss

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The title is okay, but the narrative is lacking. Too much exposition and not enough narrative. I'm afraid as an editor I would have to reject this story. I mean you covered who, where, and some of what... by why and how, is important. Plus, are you getting drunk off shoe polish remover, life, wine coolers? The story is in the details. Really, just a disappointing effort.

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The title is okay, but the narrative is lacking. Too much exposition and not enough narrative. I'm afraid as an editor I would have to reject this story. I mean you covered who, where, and some of what... by why and how, is important. Plus, are you getting drunk off shoe polish remover, life, wine coolers? The story is in the details. Really, just a disappointing effort.

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