One Shot Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 I've been writing songs and stuff for about 3 years now, but I've never put any of the lyrics out in the open. I figured this would be a cool place to do it. This one is one that I wrote recently. It's more on the dark and depressing side, but I've got happy ones too. This one was just my latest one, so I thought I'd put it out there. I had to edit it so it would sound good in writing, because in the song it's sung differently, different rhythm and feel. Now it sounds more like a poem. For all who like it and all who don't, I'd like to hear what you think, it's called The Plunge. Go easy though:D , enjoy. It only takes a second for a man to take the plunge tensions running high with one bullet in the gun so disappear into the clear and let the fits begin there's only one who'll bring you back and that's the one within But when you're so deep in the pit, you won't be coming back, you'll pull the plug, and then it's done, you've covered up your tracks you took the plunge Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tarhog Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 I really like the rhythm of the words. Kind of dark, but I could see that working in a song. The hardest thing you can do is write sparingly and convey powerful imagery. Its really tough in my opinion. Not bad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PleaseBlitz Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 I like it. I hope the music that goes with them doesnt gay it up. :thumbsup: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kosher Ham Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 I am certainly anticipating the second verse. So far you have drawn my interest. Thanks for sharing it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Burgold Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 I agree with SkinsandTerps, I think there is a little story left to tell in your lyric, but it's good. Thanks for sharing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
One Shot Posted March 25, 2007 Author Share Posted March 25, 2007 I appreciate it guys, ill add to it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Teller Posted March 25, 2007 Share Posted March 25, 2007 Statler: You call that a song?!?! I've gone on profanity-laced tirades that had more imagination than that! Waldorf: Yeah, if the music you put to it is equally riveting, I'll be able to quit my bingo night and just download your crap from www.whothe****listenstothis****.com ! HA!!! j/k One Shot. I like it so far. It's your canvas, but if I were you, "the plunge" would mean something different in each verse. Hell, in one verse it could mean "suicide" but in another it could mean "getting married." Which really is the same thing, but you get the idea. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
One Shot Posted March 25, 2007 Author Share Posted March 25, 2007 Statler: You call that a song?!?! I've gone on profanity-laced tirades that had more imagination than that! Waldorf: Yeah, if the music you put to it is equally riveting, I'll be able to quit my bingo night and just download your crap from www.whothe****listenstothis****.com ! HA!!! j/k One Shot. I like it so far. It's your canvas, but if I were you, "the plunge" would mean something different in each verse. Hell, in one verse it could mean "suicide" but in another it could mean "getting married." Which really is the same thing, but you get the idea. hahaha, yea i got it. The phrase itself is pretty versatile, so maybe I could gear it in a direction that lets the listeners choose for themselves. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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