Redskins Article from isportsweb

[dlwredskins]

First of all HAIL! Rough week for the burgandy and gold, but I would like football family to give me their opinion. I know I may have posted this link before, but I'd like to get feedback from Redskins Fans. I write articles for the this new upstart sports website for our team.

I'd like to get feedback on what you guys think of the article, especially the last one on the Lions game. Also people who have read the article have told me I was harsh or brutal....is that your opinion of it as well?

Not trying to make this a bash the Redskins thread, I'm only trying to get better at what I'm doing and give our isports site some exposure...your help would be appreciated. Please feel free to leave comments on the site and here...I'll check both...

Thanks All

HAIL!

http://isportsweb.com/sport/nfl/nfc-east/washington-redskins/

[ttr77]

First of all, there are a couple of spelling errors you might want to fix.

Second...judging by the title, it's supposed to be an opinion piece, correct? If so, it seems like the game summary does not need to be so detailed. It's almost as if supposed to be an informative article, but the author is angry enough to add their own opinion. Personally, I think articles flow better if they are either opinion-based, or designed to recap the game. Ones that do both can be hard to read.

Also, I've learned to NEVER use the word 'obviously' when writing (or speaking). If its not obvious to the reader, it's insulting. If it IS obvious, there's no need to write it.

[hobie-k]

I like it, I like it alot.

[hobie-k]

First of all, there are a couple of spelling errors you might want to fix.

Second...judging by the title, it's supposed to be an opinion piece, correct? If so, it seems like the game summary does not need to be so detailed. It's almost as if supposed to be an informative article, but the author is angry enough to add their own opinion. Personally, I think articles flow better if they are either opinion-based, or designed to recap the game. Ones that do both can be hard to read.

Also, I've learned to NEVER use the word 'obviously' when writing (or speaking). If its not obvious to the reader, it's insulting. If it IS obvious, there's no need to write it.

Hey maybe you should be a journalist...then you could "obviously" do it "write" instead of picking on someone else's article.:hysterical:

[sideshow24]

First of all, there are a couple of spelling errors you might want to fix.

Second...judging by the title, it's supposed to be an opinion piece, correct? If so, it seems like the game summary does not need to be so detailed. It's almost as if supposed to be an informative article, but the author is angry enough to add their own opinion. Personally, I think articles flow better if they are either opinion-based, or designed to recap the game. Ones that do both can be hard to read.

Also, I've learned to NEVER use the word 'obviously' when writing (or speaking). If its not obvious to the reader, it's insulting. If it IS obvious, there's no need to write it.

Agree. Good pointers too.

[ttr77]

Hey maybe you should be a journalist...then you could "obviously" do it "write" instead of picking on someone else's article.:hysterical:

He asked for feedback - and I thought it was pretty constructive.

[Jumbo]

Here's feedback. Please read and follow the rules for starting/formatting threads based on articles from other sources. For this one, you won't get an NNT so you can follow my suggestion. Good luck!

[ZoEd]

^^Jumbo, you ever thought about writing for a living? Or is that what you do? If not, damn your an extremely eloquent wordsmith my brother.

[Jumbo]

^^Jumbo, you ever thought about writing for a living? Or is that what you do? If not, damn your an extremely eloquent wordsmith my brother.

That's twice today someone has sent kind words in my direction. These days that's like when the shooting stops and you get a "what's happening...something's not right" feeling.

[ZoEd]

That's twice today someone has sent kind words in my direction. These days that's like when the shooting stops and you get a "what's happening...something's not right" feeling.

Walks like a duck, talks like a duck. Then by God........... It's a Jumbo Duck!